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Dear Fellow Classmates,
Our class is to hold a charity sale to raise money for those childre who are in need of help on January 5, 2016. As the monitor of our class, I'm calling on all students to take part in the sale.
We ask you to donate as much as you can to a fund we have set up to cover these children's tuition fees and other expenses. Unless we can raise sufficient money, those poor kids won't be able to afford to finish their educationj.
As a nation renowned worldwide for its many virtues, China and its people have been giving a helping hand to those who are in distress throught history. It's our duty to provide as much support as we can to those in need. Please contribute generously.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
评分及理由
(1)内容完整性(满分3分)
得分:2分
理由:内容基本覆盖了主要要点,包括通知慈善义卖活动和鼓励参与。但存在以下问题:1)活动具体细节不够完整(如具体时间、地点等仅提到日期);2)将"charity sale"误解为直接捐款活动,与题目要求的"义卖"形式不符,这是关键内容偏差。
(2)语言表达(满分4分)
得分:3分
理由:语言基本流畅,但有明显错误:1)"childre"拼写错误;2)"educationj"拼写错误;3)"throught"应为"th...
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