Dear Paul,
Thank you for your email regarding your assignment on an ancient Chinese scientist. I am writing to provide you with some practical advice.
I would suggest you focus on the renowned scientist Song Yingxing and his masterpiece, The Exploitation of the Works of Nature. This arrangement is designed to narrow down your research scope and build a solid foundation for your speech. Regarding your request for advice, we would appreciate it if you could draft an outline based on this framework.
We look forward to your continued support.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
评分及理由
（1）内容完整性（满分2.5分）：得分1.5分
理由：学生回复了邮件并提供了具体建议（选择宋应星及其著作），但内容存在明显缺陷。主要问题在于：1）未充分回应"如何准备口头报告"的核心请求，仅建议缩小研究范围；2）结尾出现逻辑错误（"期待您继续支持"与上下文无关）；3）未涵盖口头报告准备的关键要素（如资料收集、结构安排、演讲技巧等）。内容基本相关但关键要点缺失。
（2）语言质量（满分2.5分）：得分2分
理由：语言整体流畅，句式结构多样，但存在以下问题：1）语域不一致，前半部分使用个人建议（"I would suggest"），后半段突然转为正式商务信函用语（"we would appreciate"）；2）"This arrangement is designed to..."表述略显生硬；3）个别用词不当（如"request for advice"不符合求...
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