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2021年考研英语(一)考试试题 - 第43题回答
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发布于2025年11月23日 05:25
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Dear Sir,

I recently learned about your plans after graduation. Regarding your interest in your planning to find a job in China, I am writing to provide you with some suggestions.

It is advisable to focus on multinational companies or international organizations in major cities like Shanghai or Beijing
This strategy is designed to use your international background as a unique advantage and effectively deal with potential challenges with language and culture.
Regarding your next steps, I would appreciate it if you could share your resume with me, allowing me to recommend you to some contacts in my network.

Please let me know if you need any further information.

Yours sincerely,
Li Ming


评分及理由

(1)得分及理由(满分10分)

该邮件写作在内容完整性方面基本覆盖了要点:表达了得知对方计划、提供了在中国找工作的建议(跨国公司、大城市)、并主动提出帮助。但存在以下问题:

  • 语言表达有重复和冗余("Regarding your interest in your planning")
  • 语法结构不够自然("This strategy is designed to..."在邮件中略显正式)
  • 语域不够恰当:开头使用"Dear Sir"过于正式,与朋友关系不符
  • 格式基本正确,但段落划分可以更合理
  • 字数约120词,略超要求但不影响评分

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